Shamil, oh Shamil
Alright, Shamil! Here's the debut post. I am sorry that it has taken so long but as they say, better late than never.
How did this come about? Well, you wrote to me expressing how you envy me and my family for our apparent wealth and position in society. I must admit, I do feel blessed in my life and have a lot to be grateful for, such that I feel obliged to give something back in return. Paying zakat or making donations is one thing but I think the best contribution I can make is in terms of my time. Politics is not my cup of tea and I consider NGO activity to be only for politician wannabe's. Besides, I am too lazy to do things like feeding the street dwellers of Chow Kit Road or participate in a gotong-royong to build houses for the poor. In short, this is the best thing I think I can do: Write a blog for you and your friends with the primary objective being to help you improve your English, a general shortcoming among your generation that I think, if addressed, will go a long way towards improving your employability after you graduate and your worth to your employer. In fact, the importance of communication skills in any industry, even if you are self-employed cannot be over-emphasised.
To achieve our objective, you need to write back to me in the best English you can muster. I will correct and comment on what you write and you can all learn from the examples in the exchange. There shall be no shortforms or half sentences and try to insert every appropriate punctuation. Mind you, I have never been formally trained as an English teacher but many people say my English is quite decent. In school, I was every English teacher's favourite.
One inititial advice I have is that you should download a dictionary onto your smartphones or computers and make it a habit to look-up the meaning of any word you come across that you are unfamiliar with.
What shall I write about? Anything that comes to mind and it would help if you make suggestions. As an indication and by way of introduction, I am a faithful Arsenal supporter, a disease I am inflicted with eversince I saw Charlie George scoring and celebrating the winning goal in an FA Cup final against Liverpool in the sixties. You should look that up on Youtube. I am not looking forward to the coming season because the Arsenal squad seems to be in disarray. But I'll keep the faith nevertheless. Sports is the only thing I watch on TV these days, tennis and golf being the other games I follow. I played tennis upto the national level as a junior. My first trip on a plane was to Australia with the national junior team where among others we played in the Australian Open tournament. Golf is my major pre-occupation these days.
My other hobby these days is reading. It has been a life-long habit for me to read myself to sleep. I used to have a pile of books on my bedside table but these days, I do most of my reading off my IPad. There are thousands of books you can download for free. What do I read about? For the past 15 years, it's largely to do with learning what it means to be a Muslim which seems to be a never-ending quest. I believe that a major problem with the Ummah these days is that we do not think enough about our Muslimness and we mindlessly imitate the west in virtually everything we do, inspite of praying 5 times a day.
Career-wise, I would say I am semi-retired, having interests in businesses that I am not involved in on a day-to-day basis. When I was working, it was largely as an IT professional having obtained my basic degree in Computer Science and Accounting.
I guess that's enough for this first post. Do encourage your friends to come to this blog and post comments and questions in English. If you want to be good at anything, you need to practice, wouldn't you agree?
uncle oh uncle
ReplyDeletei am sorry uncle
nowadays..i am quite busy because i am working at domino pizza(glenmarie)
just now..when i checked my email
my first impression - speechless,nervous & my lips move to smile..i dont know why i am feeling nervous..hehe
I just wanted to let you know how much I
appreciate everything you've done to help me improve for my english.
oke..from now..you re my online english teacher
i hope you can help me if my sentence going terrible..hehe
if i am not mistaken..the last essay I wrote when i at the foundation engineering
What shall I write about?golf?
i know you like golf alot..but for me..golf is tiger wood..tiger wood is golf..he is only one player i know beside you..
very shame of me..
oke..
lets talk about football
i know you re the die hard fan of arsenal
but you also should know that
i am the die hard fan of your enermy
man utd..hehe
i dont know from where and since when
i like that team
maybe from my brother and my cousin
when i was young
football is the boring game..
for me
wrestling is more interesting
but now
time was change as fast as light
i like to watch football very much
this is opposite when i was child
hehe
i like to watch man utd game because
the game was enjoy
and the passing of the ball is very smooth
for me
arsenal is the best club that has nice game play
but sometime
the tactical is not quite good..
please keep nasri at the emirates and fabregas should also tell the fans about his plans for next season.
i believe Arsenal is good team but,
the team must keep those endemic player
like Nasir, Sesc and need class striker+centeral defence in order to compete with all competition & effective like Barca....
i think that enough for this..i am not the professional commentator to judge it..hihi
already 3 am..tq uncle for your concern..if you want to order pizza..just call me..and i will call you back..have a nice day..assalamualaikum..
Well done, Shamil. You can write in full sentences after all. And I think, this is at great expense to your image that you have so carefully cultivated among your friends. Am I right that this is considered "uncool" among your peers? Don't worry. Peer pressure is one of those things that is difficult to handle in your life especially at your age. But if you want to make the most out of your life, you must do what you think is good for you, not because of other people.
ReplyDeleteThe first comment I want to make about what you wrote is that you must begin every sentence with a capital letter. I think you know this but you are just being lazy. Next, I hope you can cut out the "hehe" and pay more attention to punctuations.
Here is the edited version of what you wrote. Scrutinise the changes I made and try to understand why I made them.
I am sorry, Uncle. Nowadays, I am quite busy because I am working at Domino’s Pizza (Glenmarie). Just now, when I checked my email, I became speechless, nervous and my lips moved to smile. I don’t know why I am feeling nervous. I just wanted to let you know how much I appreciate everything you are doing to help me improve for my English. OK, from now on you are my online English teacher. I hope you can help me if my sentence construction is terrible. If I am not mistaken, the last essay I wrote was when I was doing Foundation Engineering.
What shall I write about? Golf? I know you like golf a lot. But for me, golf is Tiger Woods. Tiger Woods is golf. He is only one player I know beside you. Very shameful of me!
OK, let’s talk about football. I know you are a die-hard fan of Arsenal. But you should know that I am a die-hard fan of your enemy, Manchester United. I don’t know from where and since when I like that team. Maybe it was from my brother and my cousin. When I was young, football was a boring game. For me, wrestling is more interesting but now time has changed as fast as lightning. I like to watch football very, much which is the opposite of when I was a child. I like to watch Manchester United games because it is enjoyable and their passing of the ball is very smooth. For me, Arsenal is the best club in terms of the quality of their play but sometimes their tactics are not so good. Please keep Nasri at the Emirates and Fabregas should also tell the fans about his plans for next season. I believe Arsenal is a good team but the team must keep dynamic players like Nasri, Cesc and they need a class striker and a central defender in order to be competitive and effective like Barca.
I think that is enough for now. I am not a professional commentator to judge it. It’s already 3 am. Thank you, Uncle for your concern. If you want to order pizza, just call me and I will call you back. Have a nice day.
Assalamualaikum.
Shamil, see if you can get as many of your friends as possible to join us in this virtual classroom.
ReplyDeletesir, you play golf? lets hang out
ReplyDeleteDominic
ReplyDeleteSure. What's your handicap?
wow,amazing.. shamil start to learn how to write a good essay.. Well done bro.. Keep it up..
ReplyDeletei have an illegal handicap currently, but i am the average golfer who can hit around 200m and score pars once a while. I won second place for MSSD Muar back in 2008 :D
ReplyDeleteAsslamualaikum uncle. I admit I made a mistake.You did a good job.Please, feel free to correct my mistakes. Thank you very much. If you have a leisure time,can you write a post about your life at university and give us some tips.
ReplyDeleteMyliki and Dom: You must be Shamil's really good friends to be here. Thanks, for joining us but in order to keep to the spirit of this blog, it would be nice if you can write in good, proper English, with appropriate capital letters and punctuations. And, Dom, I'll take you for a round at my club one of these days when I am lacking a fourth ball.
ReplyDeleteShamil:
ReplyDeleteFantastic! I think the problem you have with your English is 2-fold. Firstly, your habit of writing in the customary style of your peers when you are online and secondly, plain laziness.
Here's an improved version of what you wrote:
Asslamualaikum uncle.
I admit I made a lot of mistakes in my posting.You did a good job with correcting them. Please, feel free to continue to do that. Thank you very much.
(New paragraph)
If you have time to spare, can you write a post about your life at university and give us some tips?
Of course I can do that, Shamil. In fact, treat me like a mentor. Ask me any question, not just to keep our online conversation going but also to learn from my experience. I can benefit as well as this forum will enable me to get to know people in your age group better.
Hi uncle and guys! Well done my coolest friend remy a.k.a Shamil and also his great uncle for this initiative to bring us together for a better future. Here I am will always supporting you remy and uncle because English of mine also not good enough. Hope this will be done greatly!
ReplyDeleteHello there! This is what I'm really waiting for. a virtual English class. If u don't mind,can u correct me if I do mistakes too, uncle KAB56? or should I call u uncle Kamaruddin? That is your name right? If I'm not mistaken, and sorry if I'm wrong.
ReplyDeleteHi Arif. "am" and "will" shouldn't go together. I would rewrite the sentence as, "Here I am, supporting you, Remy, and Uncle because my English is also not good enough. Hope this blog will be a success!".
ReplyDeletePay more attention to punctuations.
Welcome Al! Here's my correction of what you wrote:
This is what I have been waiting for: a virtual English class. If u don't mind, can you please correct me if I make mistakes too, uncle KAB56? Or, should I call you uncle Kamaruddin? That is your name right? Sorry if I'm wrong.
I can't always explain the changes I make but "make mistakes" sounds better than "do mistakes", right?
Actually, I remember my English teacher telling us to never start a sentence with "or", "but" and "and". However, this doesn't seem to be strictly followed nowadays.